Thursday 25 June 2009

Patient X - Part 4

Rebecca and Jamie were sitting around a coffee table in a yellow living room. It was too much like a waiting room for Jamie's liking.
"So, I presume you know that your parents are on holiday?", Rebecca was saying, sipping a cup of tea at every break.
"This is, in fact, a LIE. Your parents are dead. They died in the car crash, but you survived. This note..." she held it up"...is fake. I wrote it with the hope that you wouldn't find out the truth, at least not until you were ready." All through the speech, she was slowly opening the note. It was too depressing for Jamie. Tears began to well up in his eyes.
"W-why?"
"You need to rest, Jamie. Carry on with your life. I will check up on you everyday to make sure you are alright. You might want to stay off school for a few days." Rebecca got up and left the room. Jamie was so upset he didn't even hear the front door close.

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Jamie returned to school a week later. As Rebecca had promised, she had visited him everyday to make sure he was alright. The only thing he was really dreading was Tommy.
"Oi, Ginger! I see yer back today. What's wrong? Upset about yer parents death?"
Jamie froze. He was prepared with an insult, but it slipped away.
"What? How do you know about that?" Jamie was determined not to break down, especially when a crowd was forming.
"Yeah, I know what happened to yer parents, but I ain't going soft on you!" Tommy aimed a kick at Jamie's leg and tripped him up. While Jamie was down, Tommy started to kick Jamie in the stomach, and didn't stop. The kicks were getting harder. Blood and vomit flecked the ground.
"Please, just let me die..." Jamie whispered to himself. Then, everything went white.

8 comments:

  1. Hmm...

    This is the penultimate part. But where can it go now?

    Also, The Colours Within VII (Yellow) is out!

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  2. ....will my character be killed off? o.O

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  3. Woo the colours within! No, Tommy, you won't die.

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  4. i've just read all your story so far...i likes it very much so!! hope to read the next part soon :)

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  5. Come on! Please write the next part before I die of tension!!!

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  6. Well, Mark, I don't want people dying because I haven't finished a story. That's right, Patient X will have finished by 30th June! Or maybe sooner, it depends how often you check this blog.

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  7. i don't wanna die! :( i've never been an antagonist before *demands everyone to marvel at his incredible use of a sophisticated word*

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